Moon Between the Mountains

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    Found this buried in the middle of a text file, and I'm not sure how old it is. It's another one we wrote together, at a desktop computer, maybe last fall? Or late summer. I remember that I blasted out the first verse (it came out of a deep conversation we'd been having), started fumbling and mumbling over the second... She scooted me out of the way, finished #2, and whipped out a nice little bridge. And so on and so forth. I made a few small edits after I copied it into this post. The title is an afterthought.


    In fives and tens we're counting time
    That never seems to toe the line
    Where do we think we'll go from here?
    Climbing walls of forged veneer
    Can’t see the moon from here

    Up one mountain, chase another
    Nothing waits to be discovered
    I wonder why we even try
    We can't expect to get it right
    Until the moon revamps the night

    Licking wounds time can't erase
    We'll disappear without a trace
    And in the shadows we'll be safe

    Tonight we'll find where we belong
    In every note of a moonlit song
    Forget what's right, rewrite the wrong
    And then we'll know where we belong
    We'll know where we belong

    I look at you, I hear your voice
    And know I need no other choice
    I ache to touch your shining face
    And kiss your lips, my healing grace,
    'Til the moonlight finds its place

    Licking wounds time can't erase
    We'll disappear without a trace
    And in the shadows we'll be safe...
    In the shadows we'll be safe.
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  2. mexico62 said:

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    Hi MoonRide*r*:

    You know that I like a lot your writings, you have a perfect expression and I hope some day I can express my feelings and thoughts as good as you do. But for the moment I must admit that I need to continue with my English lessons.

    For example, when you say "I ache to touch your shining face", It made me think that it was a pain for you to touch the skin of your loved lady, but now I know that you mean "yern, long for.."

    Sorry for my ingnorance, but thanks to all of you I can learn more everyday. You are a number one
     
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    an absolutely brilliant end of an otherwise impressive flow of thoughts:

    "licking wounds time can't erase
    we'll disappear without a trace
    and in the shadows we'll be safe
    in the shadows we'll be safe..."



    I have sometimes wondered if that exact is the reason why parents want kids.
    They fear disappearing without a trace
    Human beings have an urge to know about "something to come, be it paradise or kids"

    But it's also a mirror of intimacy the two of you have experienced.
    Great, Moon!
     
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    I've always loved your style. Also, I'm back lol.
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by mexico62 View Post
    ache... yern, long for..
    Thanks for you comments my friend. And that's exactly right; to ache means to want (yearn) in such depth and strength of passion that it controls every other emotion.
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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post
    Human beings have an urge to know about "something to come, be it paradise or kids"

    But it's also a mirror of intimacy the two of you have experienced.
    Great, Moon!
    Thanks amaryn and I agree... Legacy... After we die, will that be all there was of us? It's not a very comforting thought, except for those of us who do believe in afterlife.
    There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Inskeepruler View Post
    I've always loved your style. Also, I'm back lol.
    Hey and thanks! And that's great to hear. Been missing a few of the "old-timers" who used to keep us going with something new on a regular basis. And I hope my stuff has improved at least a little bit over the past year or so
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    Thanks on behalf of Tess too, coz she wrote all of this:

    We can't expect to get it right
    Until the moon revamps the night

    Licking wounds time can't erase
    We'll disappear without a trace
    And in the shadows we'll be safe

    Tonight we'll find where we belong
    In every note of a moonlit song
    Forget what's right, rewrite the wrong
    And then we'll know where we belong
    We'll know where we belong


    ... except for "rewrite the wrong". I'm kinda proud of that little play on homonyms
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    Ah yes this I just have to tell you, this reminds me so much of Kamelot, I don't know why but the style just seems fit perfectly. I could totally hear Roy Khans voice in this haha ^^
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Eccer View Post
    ...Kamelot... I could totally hear Roy Khans voice in this haha ^^
    Biggie Thanks Eccer, and I just pointed my girl Tess to your post, coz she's an old mega-fan of Kamelot and Roy Khan specifically. This will seriously make her day
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    ......I find this nearly a year after you put it up here and now wonder why this isn't all you. I do remember us working on it together but i don't 'read' myself in this at all. Whatever or however i may have added to it just (so it seems now) came from being caught up in the spell of where you were at the time. This really is all yours dushen'ka and is really beautiful <33
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
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    Quote Originally Posted by Eccer View Post
    Ah yes this I just have to tell you, this reminds me so much of Kamelot, I don't know why but the style just seems fit perfectly. I could totally hear Roy Khans voice in this haha ^^
    5-6 years after I first discovered Roy Khan's Kamelot he's still one of my all time favorite singer/songwriters, and so i really appreciate your comment Eccer, while still trying to figure out why i can claim any credit at all for any part of Moon's artistic creation
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by MoonRide*r* View Post
    Biggie Thanks Eccer, and I just pointed my girl Tess to your post
    and then it took me a whole 8 months to actually comment. sorry
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
    ~♥♥~