Living in Twilight

I'd like to turn off the TV
And pour myself a drink
No more talkshows or movies
I need some time to think
I still recall how it felt when I was small
I thought I could win it all
There was one thing I was sure of
One day I would sell out the Albert Hall

(chorus) Don't wanna live in twilght
Don't wanna live my life in twilight
Wanna live my life in the limelight
Wanna spend my time in the spotlights
I don't wanna live my life
In twilght

All my life I have been trying
But it's always been unfair
There's no point in denying
It didn't get me anywhere
It is true I have banged on a thousand doors
Guess I know the score
They slammed the doors right in my face
But I'll never give up trying
That's for sure

chorus

I am destined for stardom
I know that for a fact
It's my only objective
I won't settle for any less
Blind ambition will never leave me alone
I'll never change my tone
Should I fail to succeed it
Forever I'll be trapped in a twilight zone

Dang!..this is awesome!! I like the rhyimg too.keep up

Originally Posted by RickeyJoe

I really like the verses. However, I am not too keen on the chorus, I feel that it could definitely be better so as to match the caliber of the verses.

I completely agree with Rickey.Verses are good,the chorus seems rushed,not as near as clever as the verses.

@ Wilson: Thanks!
@ RickeyJoe and Doug: I wrote the chorus years before I wrote the verses. Somehow the chorus became 'fixed' in my head. When I finally took the time to complete the song, it never occurred to me to change the chorus. However, when I try to imagine how these lyrics would seem for somebody who has never read them before, your critique definitely makes sense. I will give a rewrite of the chorus some serious thought. I think this is what this forum should be about: critically evaluating each others lyrics so we can all improve our writing skills.