Downtown

Took a bus to the other side of town
Found a man who could turn a frown upside down
He spoke smooth, as a rushing river
He spoke words that would make you quiver
He said we got the man to set you free
He's got the stuff that don't grow on trees
The kind of things you see in the movies
Like peace and happy memories
"Chorus"
I've got buildings all around
I feel awake but I'm nowhere to be found
I feel the ashes from the chimneys
Come raining down
I am I am in downtown

Walking down the boulevards
The streets surround me like jagged shards
The cars of plenty erode away
The road, like river rushing in the day
I wonder how it came to this
Rivers of steal and total remiss
The man looked at me and said
The world will spin until it's dead
"Chorus"
I've got buildings all around
I feel awake but I'm nowhere to be found
I feel the ashes from the chimneys
Come raining down
I am I am in downtown
"Bridge"
I say how
Do you escape this sound
The sound of anguish
So easy to be found
Can you hear the blood
Flowing in an out
Of the streets
With open breathing mouths
I wonder if this is how it is?
Is this the world broken and spent?
Caught here in the middle of downtown
Running in and out and all around
"Chorus"
We've got buildings all around
We feel awake but we're nowhere to be found
We feel the ashes from the chimneys
Come raining down
We we are in downtown

The man said listen to me now
You can, you can be found
Just listen to the sweet sound
Within your heart the truth can be found

John,I come around to see if any of my favorite writers have posted anything.Since you're one of them,I'm here!Let me make a suggestion,I heavily hope you consider......."I don't know what to say,I don't know what to do*"instead of that "anyhow" thing!Believe me on this one..........good write,as always!*you'll be in good company with this line.No,it's not mine,but I wish it was!
(one more thing......great avatar!)

Good suggestion Doug! Yeah my avatar does look pretty cool it's rare when I am in good photos haha the lighting has to be just right.

like it, very good "

I'm glad you took my suggestion,sort of."I don't know what to say, I don't know what to do!"Has such power...........oh,well,I tried!
you'd have to hear it sung to get what I'm going for!

I'm sorry Doug I meant to change it I didn't look what I was doing haha.

Per-fec-to!!!!

I like how the bridge (best part of the lyrics) is lengthy and it connects the other parts of the lyrics together. This could be a good slow-burner type of a song. Perhaps consider combining the first two verses as one. They are short; quickly delve into the chorus, and they don't allow for enough time to let your ideas simmer. As for the chorus, lines 2 and 3 are out of tone with the other lines. They are too plain. All in all, this has the potential to be a truly great song, as you have already provided the right amount of material. Onward and upward, Johnb31! You have so much potential and I was very pleased to read your lyrics.

Thank you so much for your comment!! I forgot about this song so thank you for bringing it to my attention. I'll look into improving this song thanking for helping me.