Way.Point

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  1. StadiaMania's Avatar

    StadiaMania said:

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    On the road rolling tires/
    Old Flyers on my feet/
    Holding fire from the tree/
    Blowing smoke into the breeze/
    Gold scriber era sown into my mind's black hole/
    Create space to drift off in for a while, alone/
    Solo cypher/

    Rewinding time's swift slope as I climb/
    Through my past's apparatuses/
    Studied the written atlas/
    Mapped out for our soul's path/
    To one day reach the mansions that sit just outside man's grasp/
    A land made from Devine hands/

    Streets lined with precious stones/
    Celestial architecture in rows designed to stretch out forever/
    Dreams do come true/
    Just don't neglect em'/
    Root the goals you elected and let them grow/
    Homie hope is infectious/
    Go get infected/

    Don't fret over oceans ahead/
    Or wait for life to show you how short it is way before you respect it/
    Catch me trekking through the storm ridden valleys within it/
    Shadow of death left hidden behind the signs of incentive, to be alive/

    Watching day hold night's image, Winter time/
    The wind spinning vicious/
    Still this light bulb flickers inside/
    Hearts filled with emptiness/
    I feel something different in mine/
    Tryna become aligned with what the Holy Scripture describes/

    Went and voided my ticket for a one way trip, down to the bottomless pit/
    I'd rather sit on clouds and kick it around those who want the bottom to only be those clouds on the sole of their kicks/
    Go to a home where I'm close to my friends, and folks I've known/

    Hope you all find meaning for believing/
    Indigo child smiling for no reason it seems/
    Even since a seed I've been reaching for freedom/
    Place my faith in Yahweh until the day that I meet Him/

    Seasons of change blend evenly/
    Frequently/
    For those who stay the same/
    Broke through the chains that composed my distain/
    Arranged my patterns in a manner that was fit for the stars/
    Tuned the negative out/
    Extended the span of my range/

    Breathe life into your days/
    Oxygenate the things that you say/
    Give it weight and get lifted' away/
    I know trials stand in my way, but they'll never leave me sittin'/
    Destined to find mine/
    Until then patience is my mission/

    Waitin' isn't though/
    I traded shame in for repentance/
    Knew I had to let it go, so I could go get it/
    Rather be forgiven than spending my life dying to fix it/
    I plan to rise/
    Fly the skies until I find my beginnin'/
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    Last edited by StadiaMania; 05-22-2014 at 05:26 PM.
     
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    Teshka said:

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    You've written some great lines here, makes me think. Lots of good line pairs with whole thoughts. I don't have a clue how it should style in song but that's ok. Ilike the simplicity of the 4th stanza as well and I assume that it's a bridge or chorus. Nice work, it's a pleasure to read.
    Music is what feelings sound like
    Listen to the Love
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    StadiaMania said:

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    Hey thanks for the feedback Teshka, glad you enjoyed it. It's just a verse, not quite meant to be a full song. Thanks for reading though!
     
  4. pq92k said:

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    This is an interesting piece you've written. I would suggest condensing it a bit so that the focus is sharpened. Some lines are a bit repetitive. The 8th section is well written. I really like the following lines: "Seasons of change blend evenly/Frequently/For those who stay the same...Extended the span of my range".