Say It for me

There aren't a lot of words, but it's a work in progress. But I don't really know how it's turning out.

Say it for me
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This storm will rage on
Peace is only a hope
Anger always punishes
But patience hurts
The truth will damage
But lies kill more
I would know.
Follow your own path
My road is closed
Nothing but broken stone
I pave a new road, but it's too much
A light flickered on
And that anger vanished
It was almost.. peace.
Don't turn back
Don't flip off
Stay with me
And say it again
You can hurt me
You can abuse me
You can scar me
But you will heal me
So say it
(for me)
Give me the words to carry on
Give me the hope to fight back
Give me the strength to stand up
Give me the insight to help myself.
I know you are hurt too
I know this world threw you out
I've seen the world hit you down
Let me start this off
Let me help you
Let me give you a chance
Let me take care of your heart
So I can put this bluntly
Or expand the context
Not a speck of your life is wrong
You are pure perfection
You are the light in the dark
Only you can hurt yourself
You are beautiful.
I love everything you are
I love you.

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Cringe worthy I'm aware XD

I like it a lot. It's not like a typical love song, it's very hope-inspiring. The lines "You can hurt me [...] But you will heal me" are particularly powerful to me. Nice job!

Most my writings have actually been targeted at my past when my ex commitee suicide, I mostly only do poetry but I'm trying to get into song writing more

Committed*

I think it’s really well written and you can feel the emotion in the words you write! I like it. I can see what you mean when you said very similar styles!

Thank you!

And yeah Alucard, it's the whole like sad feeling but the song somehow still gives across a feeling of hope

I see what you going for bro add content to your multies though you know what i mean put a lil structure in your bars give it some body and itll be dope pimp tell a story with your music dont make it sound written or templated be unique man

Something like this

So its ok
Who said you can say it for me
The funk i look like letting some trick take the glory
But i love you
Everytime i say it you just tell me funk you
You drive me crazy jason vorhees
Just tell me who said you can say it for me .....
Just constructive criticism is all im giving bub point to point music is whack tell a story