good rap? 13 years old

im like a rocket ship i get a countdown from ten. i start to load up by the time we hit seven. its gettin close now wer at three. but instead of takin off i shoot all the mutha ****as who resent me. Whether it’s raining 3’s or at the fancy restaurants rememberin’ to say please. The fames taken me somewhere I cannot retrieve. But where its taken me is beyond belief. Just keep yo’ head up. It’ll take you places you can’t believe. I can’t believe where its taken me. No longer is it a hobby it’s a way of life. Its what’s keeping me up all those late nights. Nothins on my mind besides this rhythm and rhyme. This is what I want, ive given up all my free time. Its taking over my life, is this right?. **** it I don’t care. Im gonna let my headphones blare.

It's not real, and I understand it was meant to be inspirational but these kind of songs are only inspirational coming from somebody who has achieved the fame. Since you are both 13 and posting on a random rap forum, I am guessing neither of those are true. Why don't you try writing something about how your life actually is now. If you work hard you can achieve the fame and begin to inspire others to do the same, but for now, it doesn't work. You shouldn't rap about fame and killing just because that's what the cool rappers do. When people rap about fame, it usually follows a series of songs in a timeline starting from when they were poor and the journey to how they got the fame. I generally see fame as one of those things you have to earn the right to rap about.

On a different note, aside from the fact it's not entirely your real life, the rhymes were good. If you write a few songs on where your life currently is, things like successes, hardships, and general experiences that you have had, I would love to read more.