12 New Lines I'm Considering for a Recording - Thoughts?

The name's Beazy-B, but you already knew
A microphone fiend, check two one two
Sticking it to you like I threw hot glue
Got sharper fukking cuts than a new hair dew

Lyrical mastermind, I do this sh!t all the time
Even Dr. Seuss would be jealous of how I rhyme
Throw me a beat, I'll pick it up on a fukking dime
Leave you in awe, I make you hit stop, then rewind

I'm a prodigy, haters never bother me
Surgical precision and I'm handing out lobotomies
Give it up now because you'll never be on top of me
Your chances are slim, don't play me, play the lottery

Need's punches. but we all struggle with it time to time

Originally Posted by HomeGrownProduction

Need's punches. but we all struggle with it time to time

Do the lyrics need punches, or the flow?

Use more multisyllabic rhymes and internal rhymes.

Originally Posted by Tre_fly

Use more multisyllabic rhymes and internal rhymes.

I'm extremely simplistic. I'll admit it. But it works for me mostly, especially with small word play. Wasn't too comfortable with these lines, hence me posting them. I definitely want to experiment with ABC rhyming format, I'm pretty new to this. I got a song I made in my started threads that you should check out and tell me what you think - since they're complete. Thanks for the feedback man.

It was good....me and my boi enjoyed reading it...hit me up if you wanna battle!

Multi's and internals do help. But it wasn't bad. I say edit it before you record. You only want to record the stuff you're absolutely confident with.