Serendipity

(Verse 1)
Fourteen nights and fourteen days
Struggles, fights and troubled ways
Will you be there in the end?
I guess I'll have to see again

You tried to run but you ran too slow
And now I suppose it's time to go
Do you even remember my name?
I guess your story stayed the same

(Chorus)
Don't let go
of me
You're the light in my sky
tonight

(Verse 2)
Where to start where to begin?
You closed the door as I walked in
I didn't have time to scream
because you ripped out everything between;

my heart and this endangered life of mine
Focus now, we're low on time
Too much jealousy and hate;
a double edged sword called Fate

(Chorus)
Don't let go
of me
It's time to move
on
Don't let go
of me
You're the light in my sky
tonight

(Bridge)
So I'll tell you what,
I'll give you an ultimatum
Tonight we're going to end this
once and for all

So I'll make you beg
for this apology you crave
Tonight I'm going to end this
for once and for all

(Chorus)
Don't let go
of me
It's time to move
on

PointZero,
This I love.I don't know how to tell you how cool I think this song is.Notice I said song,not Song Lyric.It "sings itself"right off the page.This is great writing.
One Suggestion;(Verse 2)Cut "between"from the line,it still rhymes,and has more impact,in my opinion.

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

PointZero,
This I love.I don't know how to tell you how cool I think this song is.Notice I said song,not Song Lyric.It "sings itself"right off the page.This is great writing.
One Suggestion;(Verse 2)Cut "everything"from the line,it still rhymes,and has more impact,in my opinion.

Ah, thanks Doug!

And thanks Rickey, you always have positive things to say.

See above correction,sorry for the confusion!