I Visit Me

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  1. LooknGlass said:

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    I have been busy and going through some heavy stuff lately and I have had writers block. I have a tune in mind for this but it is a very rough 1st draft. Any comments would be welcome.




    Deep down within my soul
    as far as I can go;
    I visit me,
    the me that's real.

    Somewhere in my heart
    in a part not torn apart
    I visit me,
    where I still feel.

    I visit me,
    the me you don't see.

    Buried deep within my mind,
    in a place hard to find,
    I visit me,
    where hope still lives.

    At the core of my being,
    where I bottle everything,
    I visit me,
    the me that still forgives.

    I visit me,
    the me you don't see.

    Someday I may show myself,
    but first I must be healed.
    What scares me
    Is what me
    there'll be
    by the time I am revealed.

    Deep down within my soul
    as far as I can go,
    I visit me;
    the me that's real.

    I visit me
    I visit me

    © L. James Tanner
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    It reads more poem that song.I hope when you visit you,you're okay.
    Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 03-23-2013 at 05:21 PM.
     
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    curiosity_kills_the_cat said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    I reads more poem that song.I hope when you visit you,you're okay.
    I agree, sure reads like a poem...lol@ the 2nd statement.
     
  4. LooknGlass said:

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    It may read like a poem, but I wrote it with a tune in mind. Kinda a slow country/alt country/ song.
     
  5. Malay_razor said:

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    Well written. Seriously its good.
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Original approach of soulsearching. I liked what I read and I am sure Groucho Marx would say the same,lol

    Country? No way; sorry to say, but this I'd like to sing in melodious rockstyle, but then again me is me......