dope rhymes man, I'll edit with more feedback later. first impression's good though.
EDIT: yeah man it's dope. I thought the flow was fairly consistent, lost it once or twice but that might just be how I'm reading it. great multis and some cool metas. my favourite was the "no d!cks you can't (grasp ^) me" pointing up to the "ghostly swift", nice. not so keen on the "attack on a cat", thought after the amass/a-mass (sick) start it could've been stronger... plus you used "cat" in the previous line and I'm not a fan of repitition unless it's for a word play or chorus line... just personal taste though, also if you remove the "on-a-cat an..." bit then it flows better too with "I'll amass a-mass attack... have it loud and disturbing" seeing as it follows a short line.
Last edited by CheesyBacon; 02-11-2012 at 05:17 AM.
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