Quickly wrote it 5mins after i met a girl at school lol let me know what u think

Im a college student but lately ive just been writing raps and i need to know if i have at least some skill. if not its all good.


Today i went on just doing my thing
struttung down the hall lovin' this feeling,
walking under the sunshine of Califor-N.I.A.
Trying to get paper planes like M.I.A.,
Just having fun and hoping to make it big
then i met this girl like damn i dig,
she's acting tough like she dont care
yea i like that and im feeling her hair,
then she says shes single....Damn its on!
We should hangout maybe party...few shots of Patron!
we're both laughing then she says shes gotta go
i ask for her number as i whip out my phone
chatting a little bit and im in my zone
then she says "you better not blow up my phone"
i laugh and just said "hit you with a text when i get home",
she gets in her car and waves good bye
i know we just met but damn you fly.

Can I just say that I know practically nothing about raps but I really really like this!!! It's just got that spark to it and just seems to work!!! Nice job

hahaha thanks!!!! i still need to finish it but i wrote it really fast!! but thank you! i really appreciate, i like writing lyrics but i never knew if i was good or not...so just trying to get opinions!

Well, you came to the right place

It's not too bad at all. I'd love to see it when more gets tacked on to it.

Awesome bro, I can't really say your bad at all. Yurally good at rhyming and using it right, I'd like to see more from yeh

Yea guys....Thanks!!!! i really appreciate...im just in the begginning stages, just trying it out seeing if i got some talent.

Haha I think you do! Hm, Beginning stages.. If you can write this after you just barley met a gal u liked then your pretty damn good bro

hahaha it was just one of those perfect moments! like lately i been like freestyling, messing around when walking across campus or driving home but this time after talking to this girl i was freestyling in my mind walking to the library and i was like dayumm i need to write this down!!! ahahha i wrote this pretty quick and i thought it sounded good so i posted it on here. i actually wrote more, finished it off and posted it!! i like this 1st verse the best but idk the rest is good. i wrote one song before this but idk about it....i like this one more just cus it was happy and i was feeling it i read some of ur stuff too...you got some skills

Haha heck yeah perfect moment! Hey I wanna see your songgggggg xD I bet it's good I wanna see more from yeh lol
Cmon I don't bite ! Hahaha, yeah 1st verse is pretty awesome. Wait, awesome? More like the whole thing :P

N whuttt? My stuff? Boyy why u all up in my business?! Lmao jkjk hahaha lately my work has been nothing but crap. I swear, I need to get bk up on my A-Game or I'm screwed D;

yea i posted it!!! it says something like finished the whole song i have another one on there but that one is more angry hahah maybe to angry for urself! idk if you ll feel it

haha i just been looking over ur stuff no biggy....you got some skills. and why are you screwed?

Haha you don't know me! I can get as angry as 1 2 3 ! Lol I'll read it, don't worry hahaha now I'm all exited lmao.

I haven't been writing much, probably about a month or two ago I was writing songs like Hell was arriving tomorrow. Then I took a long break n realized during that break I was fo'gettin how I write my music. So right now I'm BARLEY climbing bk uhpp...

ohhh for sure! yea you probably have to get back into, im sure it ll flow once you start practing!!

and i bet you get angry as hell!!! haha not denying but idk how old you are and definately probably for people older then 17! lyrics a little crazy haha
but if you are under 18, you got some mad skills...definately keep with it. got some talent

Lmao I'm 13 hahaha
Yea I do get as mad as hell! N what? 17?! Pfft!!! Haha
Mad skills, eh? Lol I'm just a Kidd I hope my writing improves by the time I turn 16 lol !

N woooo hoooo I'm glad to see that you posted to rest of it, lol

damnnn! you got some skills...keep it up!!!
hahaha no problem, im glad you liked it!
i wanna see if i can get somewhere with it but we ll see!! only time will tell
but yea by 16 you should be bomb!! hahha

Lol! Thanks man I appreciate it!
Yeah YOU keep it uhpp your really good at this writing business, I believe with the right words you're gonna go far xD
Lol ^^ hope so, n I hope I'll still be here so I can prove it!! But for right now, it's past my bedtime. Yes. I'm a kid. I have a bedtime. But im an insomniac. So bedtimes wait xD

for sure!! good luck

Haha thanxx- GtG Nightt