Dead ( I am desparate for a comment:))

In a warm sunny day
The lights popped out
can't believe my eyes
It's all over now
No shock, no spark, no blowing up the world.
Just the cracked meter says, "It's dead!"

It's dead like a dog
It wont breath again
It was so silent
nothing happened
No shock, no spark, no blowing up the world
The dogs cried out,"It's dead!"

It's dead, it's cold
The old never sparks
But death is swift
And it was fast
No shock, no spark, no blowing up the world
Put out the lights, it's dead!"

It's gone after all
No serviceable parts
Goodbye loyal machine
Gone forever
Turn off the switch coz it's dead...
Pull out the plug coz it's dead...
No shock, no spark, no blowing up the world
Get rid of it coz it's dead...
It's dead!

well I am lil bit confused. Plz leave some comment. At least say that it's crap...

Plz plz plz plz comment

its good but is it a song or a poem?
because if its a song ti doesnt rhyme so its not that great..but if it flows good its ok..

Thanks zoniq. I know nothing abt lyrics writing and this was my first attempt. I wont claim that it's a great piece of art coz I wrote it frm whatever was in front of me LOL